Saturday, October 9, 2010
Sean Pang's Blog: Fire Planning
Sean Pang's Blog: Fire Planning: "Characters -Tom & I Before the fire happens : feeling - excited -exuberant -could not wait for the results. How did it happen? - toppled t..."
Sean Pang's Blog: Robbery Planning
Sean Pang's Blog: Robbery Planning: "Intro - Start with flashback -just finish training & was truding back home wearily & thinking about lunch. Climax 1 (suspense) - heard hamm..."
Friday, October 8, 2010
Fire Planning
Characters
-Tom & I
Before the fire happens : feeling
- excited
-exuberant
-could not wait for the results.
How did it happen?
- toppled the bunsen burner
- it toppled onto a wooden chair and caught fire instantly.
What happened?
- the bunsen burner was topped and caused the miniature inferno
-poured alcohol
-hand caught fire
-plavced a wet towel over his hand
-grabbed a pail of water and dosed the flames
- stared speechlessly at the mess
When the fire happened? - feelings
- panic striken
-helpless
- utterly distraught
- stared speechlessly
-mouth agape with shock
What happened in the end?
- teacher administer first aid to Tom's hand
-rebuked by teacher
- supended for a week
- regret our actions
- had to pay for the damages
After the fire - feelings
- relief
-once bitten, twice shy
-Tom & I
Before the fire happens : feeling
- excited
-exuberant
-could not wait for the results.
How did it happen?
- toppled the bunsen burner
- it toppled onto a wooden chair and caught fire instantly.
What happened?
- the bunsen burner was topped and caused the miniature inferno
-poured alcohol
-hand caught fire
-plavced a wet towel over his hand
-grabbed a pail of water and dosed the flames
- stared speechlessly at the mess
When the fire happened? - feelings
- panic striken
-helpless
- utterly distraught
- stared speechlessly
-mouth agape with shock
What happened in the end?
- teacher administer first aid to Tom's hand
-rebuked by teacher
- supended for a week
- regret our actions
- had to pay for the damages
After the fire - feelings
- relief
-once bitten, twice shy
Robbery Planning
Intro
- Start with flashback
-just finish training & was truding back home wearily & thinking about lunch.
Climax 1 (suspense)
- heard hammering at my neighbour's house and went to investigate.
- found nothing wrong and went back home.
- ear piercing scream shattered the tranquility of the scene at my neighbour's house and went to investigate
- found a hammer and a broken lock at the corner which escaped from my sight the first time i investigated.
Climax 2 (more suspense)
- felt something was amiss and went to take a peek through the window
- describe the mess
- chuckled evilly as he stashed the crisp notes into the bag he was carrying and he was limping.
Body 1 (action)
- describe the fear
- fished out my mobile phone & dialled for the police
-minutes ticked by slowly
- my heart beat increased with every passing minute
- i grew impatient and decided to overpower the robber but tripped on a broom.
Body 2 (action)
- approached me menacingly with a knife in his hand
- but the sound of sirens frightened him and he dropped the knife.
- in no time, he was caught.
Ending
- upon coming back to reality, I shouted at my father.
"Dad , can you stop the hammering! Not only it is preventing me from sleeping, it is also driving me nuts!"
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- Start with flashback
-just finish training & was truding back home wearily & thinking about lunch.
Climax 1 (suspense)
- heard hammering at my neighbour's house and went to investigate.
- found nothing wrong and went back home.
- ear piercing scream shattered the tranquility of the scene at my neighbour's house and went to investigate
- found a hammer and a broken lock at the corner which escaped from my sight the first time i investigated.
Climax 2 (more suspense)
- felt something was amiss and went to take a peek through the window
- describe the mess
- chuckled evilly as he stashed the crisp notes into the bag he was carrying and he was limping.
Body 1 (action)
- describe the fear
- fished out my mobile phone & dialled for the police
-minutes ticked by slowly
- my heart beat increased with every passing minute
- i grew impatient and decided to overpower the robber but tripped on a broom.
Body 2 (action)
- approached me menacingly with a knife in his hand
- but the sound of sirens frightened him and he dropped the knife.
- in no time, he was caught.
Ending
- upon coming back to reality, I shouted at my father.
"Dad , can you stop the hammering! Not only it is preventing me from sleeping, it is also driving me nuts!"
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Monday, August 16, 2010
Writing Practice 9 - robbery compo
"Pink......Pink......!" The sound of a hammer smashing on metal woke me from my heavy slumber. Beats of sweat formed on my forehead and my hands grew clammy as my memory was jolted back to that nerve-wrecking incident.
"Pink......Pink......!" A smashing sound echoed around the corridors. I had just finished my table tennis training and was trudging home wearily. "What could that sound be?" I questioned myself. Soon curiosity got the better of me and I went to investigate the source of the sound. However, before I could reach the sound, the hammering stopped. Certainly I had heard the sound, or was it a figment of my imagination? After waiting for a while and upon hearing nothing, I continued my way back home.
"Mmm...... this sandwich surely is yummy!" I gushed bouyantly while engulging myself to a widespread of sandwiches. "Ouch! A ear-piercing cry coming from my neighbour's house broke the tranquility of the scene. Startled, I dropped the sandwich that I was munching. "Huh? I thought my neighbour went on a holiday?" I murmured under my breadth as a zillion thought raced through my mind.
I walked stealthily to my neighbour's house. At the corner of my eye, I espied a hammer and a broken lock. This was when everything struck me. To confirm my suspicion, I took a slight peek through the window. Tables and chairs were overturned and clothes were thrown on the floor. Finally, I spotted a burly man wearing cap with tattoos all over his body chuckling evilly as he stashed the crisp fresh notes into the canvas bag he was carrying. He was also limping. Upon seeing this, I dialled for the police with shakey hands and told them what had happened. Minutes ticked by slowly and my heartbeat increased with every passing minute.
Soon impatience overwhelmed me and I decided to catch the robber myself. I picked up a stick and started to move towards him when his attention was diverted to a huge gem. " Blam!" I tripped and fell to the ground like a sack of potatoes. Beside me lay an innocent looking broom lying on the floor. The sound made the robber turn and look at me. When he saw my presence, he yielded out a huge knife and approached me menacingly. The blade seemed to glisten with evil. My heart nearly missed a beat as I stood rooted to the ground, stunned. I shut my eyes tightly praying that the police appear at once. "It is okay now." I heard a gentle voice. When I opened my eyes, I saw two police officers escorting the robber to the police car. Before the car drove off, the man flashed me an evil smile so evil that it was carved in my memory so deeply that I would never forget.
Upon returning to reality, I shouted at my father, "Dad, can you stop the hammering! Not only it is preventing me from sleeping, it is also driving me nuts!"
"Pink......Pink......!" A smashing sound echoed around the corridors. I had just finished my table tennis training and was trudging home wearily. "What could that sound be?" I questioned myself. Soon curiosity got the better of me and I went to investigate the source of the sound. However, before I could reach the sound, the hammering stopped. Certainly I had heard the sound, or was it a figment of my imagination? After waiting for a while and upon hearing nothing, I continued my way back home.
"Mmm...... this sandwich surely is yummy!" I gushed bouyantly while engulging myself to a widespread of sandwiches. "Ouch! A ear-piercing cry coming from my neighbour's house broke the tranquility of the scene. Startled, I dropped the sandwich that I was munching. "Huh? I thought my neighbour went on a holiday?" I murmured under my breadth as a zillion thought raced through my mind.
I walked stealthily to my neighbour's house. At the corner of my eye, I espied a hammer and a broken lock. This was when everything struck me. To confirm my suspicion, I took a slight peek through the window. Tables and chairs were overturned and clothes were thrown on the floor. Finally, I spotted a burly man wearing cap with tattoos all over his body chuckling evilly as he stashed the crisp fresh notes into the canvas bag he was carrying. He was also limping. Upon seeing this, I dialled for the police with shakey hands and told them what had happened. Minutes ticked by slowly and my heartbeat increased with every passing minute.
Soon impatience overwhelmed me and I decided to catch the robber myself. I picked up a stick and started to move towards him when his attention was diverted to a huge gem. " Blam!" I tripped and fell to the ground like a sack of potatoes. Beside me lay an innocent looking broom lying on the floor. The sound made the robber turn and look at me. When he saw my presence, he yielded out a huge knife and approached me menacingly. The blade seemed to glisten with evil. My heart nearly missed a beat as I stood rooted to the ground, stunned. I shut my eyes tightly praying that the police appear at once. "It is okay now." I heard a gentle voice. When I opened my eyes, I saw two police officers escorting the robber to the police car. Before the car drove off, the man flashed me an evil smile so evil that it was carved in my memory so deeply that I would never forget.
Upon returning to reality, I shouted at my father, "Dad, can you stop the hammering! Not only it is preventing me from sleeping, it is also driving me nuts!"
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